Hello everyone.
I hope you have had a blast of this beautiful weather like we have had--Cooler temperatures with a light breeze in the air. It's made yard work so much easier and definitely more enjoyable.
I'm a few days late posting my September blog. Sorry about that.
I got word from a friend of mine today that she went to the library in North Carolina where her son lives (while she was visiting he and his family). She called to say my books are there! Yea!!! Two of the three that have been turned into hard backs. Crime in The Big Easy & Be Not Afraid are in a library in NC, as well as the collection of my books -- Bayou Secrets. That tells me I wasn't dreaming. My books are spreading across America...into bookstores and libraries all across the U.S. God is faithful!
While I'm waiting to hear back on two manuscripts from my publisher, I've been working on the devotional I've told you about before. Another month is being edited and will soon be added to my website. I'm working on the forth month now. I'd love to say I'll be finished with the whole book in a month or two, but I'm writing it a little different than I write my fiction novels. So it will be added month by month until completed. When all 12 months are available, I'll see about it being turned into a book. In the meantime, for free you can download any and all months for your reading pleasure. God is the inspiration of this devotional. It's from the heart and from His Word. So those of you who are interested, go to WEBSITE and click on Devotional page.
I've started gathering material for a young adult fiction novel I've wanted to write. Maybe by the end of this year or the first of 2016, I'll have the new novel ready for my publisher to review. It's to be the first of a YA series. My main character, Lincoln Parks, is a reporter for the High School paper. He has a nose for news while living the life of a teenage boy with all the drama that comes his way. Lately my middle grandson Koby, 13 years old, and I have been hanging out a good bit. He is such a character. The boy in my book is 14, almost 15. When the idea for this novel first came to me my oldest grandson, Scotty, was my inspiration. All grown up now, my attention has turned toward Koby in guidance of my main character's personality and the goings on at schools. Turns out he's applied to be on the school paper this year. How perfect is that? I told him if he makes it onto the school newspaper's team, maybe I'll get to come by sometime and sit in the back of his class. Observe and get the real feel for how things go down making a school newspaper. I reminded him it had been a very long time since Granny had been in school. He made a very 'high tech remark' letting me know exactly how long it had been. That's my boy! So smart! And cute too!
Normally I take time at the end of my blog to share writing tips for my readers who are working to become writers or those who are already writers but still growing their craft. As I've said many times before, I hope I never stop learning. This time, however, I'm going to discuss a topic that all writers may have to face one day. I know I did. I'd like to share that with all of you who are reading my blog.
The subject I plan to address in this blog for my writer readers is also something I hope you book readers will enjoy staying tuned-in for.
TOPIC -- Bad Reviews.
As a reader you should take time to review some of the books you've read if you've enjoyed them. A bad review, well that's up to you, but I do encourage the good reviews to be added. Your favorite author would appreciate it.
I normally get good feed back on my books from a lot of people. In my heart, I always hope they go put those words on a review at some site where my books can be found...all reviews would be awesome, but one is great. Every bookstore's website and on-line bookstores have places to add reviews on books you've purchased from them. Sometimes they help readers looking for a new author to read...pointing the finger in the direction of one of your favorite authors...if you take time to review them.
I received a bad review a few months ago. As far as I know it's the first one and I let it get me down for a little while. I may have more, but I don't go looking. When I read the review, I heard what she was saying. Her review was for After You're Gone. This is a romance about a young woman who had worked hard to make a name for her self in the world of art. And just when her big moment to shine was about to happen, an old friend called needing her help immediately. My heroine, Malila, was torn between staying home in San Francisco and taking care of business, or flying off to New York City to help a friend in a dire situation. It turned out her friend was dying. She has a baby and didn't trust her only living relatives to raise her child. Reasoning for the young mother's decision was explained in the book. Anyway, she felt it necessary to call on an old friend to come to her rescue before her death, trying to make everything right in her mind and heart. The bad review came due to this woman's decision. The one who was reading the book stopped reading it. She couldn't believe anyone would give away her child for any reason.
In real life we know for a fact this happens. My husband and his twin sister were given away by their birth mother. And it happens more today than it did back then. My husband's story is not the same story as mine in After You're Gone, but in real life it does happen. Mother's give up their children for adoption for many reasons.
So immediately, when I read this bad review I thought my book wasn't sending the right message. Because when God placed this idea in my heart, the message was about choices we make as believers. My heroine had to decide between herself and someone else. She chose helping her friend over her own desires. In the end, I'm not going to tell you in case you haven't read it yet, so many things happened to Malila that changed her life, that wouldn't have happened had she not done what God led her to do. He has plans for each of us, but it's the choices we make that keep us on His path or lead us down a road of our own choosing.
I'm sorry for the woman who didn't finish reading my story, but I feel it was her loss. And although she has a right to her opinion and I respect it, I still feel After You're Gone is a wonderful romance with a good message, You just have to give it a chance. Chapter one was supposed to pull the reader in, not push them away. I hope more of you have read it and found it to be a good read or even a great read. Your reviews would be most welcome, should you decide you want others to know what you think of my book.
In the end, I didn't let the one bad review dissuade me and stop me writing more. Like I said before, I have two completed manuscripts for my publisher to consider. So I'm still writing and have plans for more.
Bad reviews come to most authors from what I've been reading. In fact, here is one particular fact I learned about a book's bad review. Check it out:
"It was one of the most boring and shallow books that I have ever read."
That is a bad review. But guess what?! It didn't hurt the book one iota. Just because that person wrote the above review, it didn't stop the book from selling a lot of copies, and it didn't stop the book from being made into a movie. AND oh yeah, it was such a great book and movie that they remade the movie again. Both times I believe the movies were a great success with the audience. I know I loved the book and the movie. The Great Gatsby was written by F. Scott Fitzgerald. Robert Redford, playing Jay Gatsby in the first film and Leonardo DiCaprio, lead in the second one, had viewers enthralled. The costumes and the characters in the book were as vivid as they were in the movies. F. Scott went on to write more novels. I did a quick count off one site I pulled up. They had 42 novels listed by him. I didn't do a large search to get an exact number. I just wanted you to know that the bad review didn't stop Fitzgerald.
So don't let bad reviews stop you from writing the book that is inside you. Who knows? Maybe you too will have a movie made from your book as well. And you readers who stayed reading my blog to the end, think of some of your favorite books you've read lately and take a few minutes this week and go write a review for that author. He/she will appreciate you.
Have a great fall!
Again, check out my website.
www.author-deborahlynne.com
On the Event page I have a few places I will be attending with my books available in case you are interested. Down south it's better to wait for the fall weather. Summers are just too hot!! I hope to see you soon! God bless you all!
Thursday, September 17, 2015
Saturday, August 15, 2015
Hello everyone.
I hope you had a great summer. School started back, so be careful
while you’re out running the roads.
Do I have a great blog in store for you today!!
As most of you know I’m working on the 4th book of the
Samantha Cain Series – Against Her Will.
While doing this, I connected with a very talented and gifted writer/freelance
editor. She is amazing. Not only do I have a one-on-one chat with her to share
with you, but also I’m going to follow it with tips I learned through the
course she taught on adding tension to your novel. You will be doubly blessed
for joining me today.
After she taught the on-line course, I picked up two of her
novels, Chasing Amanda and Finding Amanda.
I started reading Chasing Amanda right away and found
it constantly moving forward, making me keep reading until I finished the whole
thing. I didn’t want to put it down. The first scene started with a marine,
Mark Johnson, who was about to ship out to Afghanistan. Because of his training
(and because this is just the kind of guy he is) he realized someone was about
to do something so wrong…and he stepped in. What a man! The story grabs you and
pulls you in. Then it truly keeps you turning all the pages. Great job Robin.
With the sequel, Finding Amanda, Robin doesn’t fail
her readers. The story keeps you turning the pages. You won’t be disappointed.
GOOD NEWS – Those of you
who want to win a free copy of her newest book – Finding Amanda be sure
to leave a comment at the end of my blog. Those who comment will be entered
into a drawing for an autographed copy of Finding
Amanda.
*The winner will be notified via email. That’s when I’ll request
your mailing address to ship the book to you.
NOW, I’d like
to take this moment to introduce you to Robin Patchen. She is a freelance
editor, writing coach, and author. I met her through ACFW, an organization we
both belong to. She was teaching a course on adding tension to your fiction. It
was amazing. I feel I learned a lot from
this on-line course. I spent the first two weeks of July rewriting what I
thought was my final draft of book 4 of The Samantha Cain Series – Against
Her Will. Since the course I’m going back through it adding more tension. I
couldn’t believe how she made things sound so simple. While taking the course,
I dared to ask her if I could interview her for my blog. When she said yes, I
took time to find books she’d
written and ordered them for myself to read. I also found out she was more than
an author. She’s a freelance
editor. No wonder she is so phenomenal as a teacher of writing. Not only was I blessed by her course, now you
will be blessed by an interview with her.
DEBORAH: Hello Robin.
It was a joy to learn from you how to add tension to my novel. I’d like to share you with my readers and
writer friends who read my blog. I’m
going to ask you a few questions I feel will encourage my writer friends to
keep plugging away writing, and give my reader friends another new author to
check out.
ROBIN: Thanks so much for having me,
Deborah, and for your kind words. I'm so glad the tension tips helped you. I’ve been told I’m a master at adding tension, though I’m not sure if it’s a compliment when uttered across the
dinner table by your teenagers. (A little joke, of course. They wouldn’t dare.) I’m pleased to visit your blog—it’s lovely.
DEBORAH: It
sounds like your dinner table would be fun to be around. So what madeyou decide
to become an editor? Did you have the desire to write before or after you
started editing?
ROBIN: Interesting question, Deborah, because I
don’t really know the answer. I majored in Journalism forever ago, and even
then, I had a natural ability to edit, but it never occurred to me to pursue
that as a career. Though I always loved to write, I got a job in pubic
relations and marketing because it paid better than working as a reporter, and
then I quit to raise my kids. It wasn’t until after I started writing fiction
and joined a critique group that I remembered my love of editing. Even then,
years went by before a friend encouraged me to start an editing business.
DEBORAH: It
sounds exciting to me. Thank God for friends, right? Tell us about Robin’s Red
Pen.
ROBIN: I’d often talked about doing some freelance
editing, but I hadn’t done anything to pursue the dream until my friend Lacy
asked me to edit a book she planned to self-publish. I did, and she was
impressed. She was a multi-published author with a big house, and her support
really encouraged me to give it a shot. She also referred other clients to me,
and when she started her own publishing company, she asked me to be their
freelance copyeditor. I probably wouldn’t be doing this if not for the support
of Lacy and a lot of my other friends. Funny, but the name sort of came to me,
because my friends in my local writing group often talked about my “red pen.”
They’d share sob stories about how I’d taken my red pen to their babies (like
I’m some sort of manuscript murderer.) Weirdly, I thought that was fun—which
tells you a little bit about my personality—and Robin’s Red Pen was born.
DEBORAH: You have
me grinning from ear to ear, again. I love it! Did you acquire an agent before
getting published? If so, how did you find your agent?
ROBIN: I had two Christmas novellas published
through Pelican Book Group before I signed with Chip MacGregor. Interesting
story, how I came to be his client. He was slated to speak at a local writers
conference, but right before the conference, he came down with strep throat and
had to cancel. He invited all the attendees to send him a proposal. I had mine
in the mail the following Monday, and then waited. And waited. A couple of
months later, he spoke at an event at a friend’s house in Tulsa, just a
90-minute drive. A friend and I make the trek to meet him in person. He said
during his brief talk that he usually tries to respond to a proposal within six
weeks, so I very boldly (if you can call a chick shaking in her pumps bold)
approached him after his talk and told him it had been a few months since I
sent him my proposal. He apologized and
promised to look at it. Another month went by before I heard from him, and it
was almost five months before I actually signed the agent agreement with him.
That’s one way to look at the story. Another
way is this: I worked very hard on my craft for years and prayed a lot, not
just that the Lord would lead me to a great agent, but also that I would become
a better writer. When the time was right, God opened the doors.
DEBORAH: His
timing is always perfect! Who is your publisher?
ROBIN: I published two books with Pelican Book
Group, and my latest two books are self-published. With the Christian fiction
industry the way it is, Chip wasn’t able to place my book with a larger
publisher. We talked about submitting to smaller publishers, but in the end, Chip
encouraged me to self-publish. I’m so glad he did, because it’s been an awesome
ride. I still dream of landing a contract with a major house someday, but right
now, I feel I’m right where God wants me.
DEBORAH: That you
are! I’m glad I connected with you. You’re writing is fantastic so keep it up!!
Would you give us the names of your published titles?
ROBIN: One Christmas Eve came out in the fall of 2012, and Faith
House released in the fall of 2013. Finding Amanda released this
April, and Chasing Amanda, its free prequel, released July 2nd.
DEBORAH: I have
two of the four. Now I need to go buy the other two. Love your writing, your
stories. (There. It’s done. I love the computer age. J I just ordered your first
two books. I can’t wait to start another read.) So what is your next book’s
title, and what is it about? When will it be released?
ROBIN: Oh, such great questions. I hate that I don’t
have a better answer. The next book is written but not edited yet. I’m playing
with the title, “Resurrecting Reagan McAdams” or something like that. I’m
terrible at titles. It’s a romantic suspense—“What happens when a woman
discovers she accidentally married her arch-enemy?” (Although arch-enemy makes
me think Lex Luther and mwha-ha-ha laughter.) That’s as much of a synopsis as
I’ve come up with so far. The book is written, the back-cover copy, not quite.
DEBORAH: This
gives me another book to look forward to reading. BTW, I loved that laugh!! Now
for the big question, which do you enjoy more? Editing or Writing?
ROBIN: Depends on which one I’m doing. If I’m
editing, then I definitely prefer writing. But if I’m writing, I long to be
editing someone else’s words. Writing is hard.
DEBORAH: Loved
your answer. You ought to try politics next, haha. Tell us about the blog site,
Live, Write, Thrive that you appear in with 3 other editors. Do you write for
them on a regular basis sharing tips on writing?
ROBIN: I blog for Live, Write, Thrive once a month
this year on the Fatal Flaws of Fiction. It’s been great fun so far working
with the other ladies. I think there might be a book at the end of the year,
which is exciting to think about.
DEBORAH: I joined the
blog site and already shared it with my writers’ group. I am amazed we got this
interview done so quickly. I see how very busy you are; yet you took time for
us…and had me laughing throughout it all…thank you! Also I see God working in
your life and you are following the path He is leading you on. Awesome!! Thank
you for your time. You are the best. Again, you are a joy to work with. Thanks
again for the lessons on tension.
ROBIN: My pleasure. Thanks for having me!
Wasn’t that a great interview? I truly enjoyed
hearing straight from her. This should encourage you writers as it did me.
Robin Patchen is gifted. I hope you take advantage of her expertise. Here is
her bio:
Robin Patchen lives in Edmond, Oklahoma, with her husband and three teenagers. Her third book, Finding Amanda,released in April, and its free prequel, Chasing Amanda, released in July. When Robin isn't writing or caring for her family, she works as a freelance editor at Robin's Red Pen, where she specializes in Christian Fiction. Read excerpts and find out more at her website, robinpatchen.com
Robin's Red Pen: https://robinsredpen.wordpress.com/
Robin Patchen lives in Edmond, Oklahoma, with her husband and three teenagers. Her third book, Finding Amanda,released in April, and its free prequel, Chasing Amanda, released in July. When Robin isn't writing or caring for her family, she works as a freelance editor at Robin's Red Pen, where she specializes in Christian Fiction. Read excerpts and find out more at her website, robinpatchen.com
Robin's Red Pen: https://robinsredpen.wordpress.com/
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The rest of
this will be writing tips I learned on an on-line course. No matter what you write,
take time to read and soak in the knowledge Robin Patchen shared with us, the
group from ACFW who took the on-line course.
In the thesaurus tension
& conflict are considered synonyms. But for writing purposes note the
difference in the Merriam-Webster definition.
Conflict – Clash,
competition, or mutual interference of opposing or incompatible forces or
qualities…as ideas, interests, wills, etc.
Tension – Inner unrest,
striving, or imbalance…a feeling of psychological stress often manifested by
increased muscular tonus and by other physiological indicators of emotion.
So tension is not
necessarily conflict (although conflict should always be tense). Sometimes
tension is just a bit of uncertainty of things being different than we thought
they would be. When characters are feeling inner conflict, that’s tension.
In writing, talking about
tension, we’re talking about psychological
stress. But remember, while writing about your characters feelings of
tension (heartbeats race, etc), your true goal is to make your reader feel
tension.
For our purposes as
fiction authors the difference between tension and conflict:
Conflict refers to your external plot points; tension
refers to internal turmoil
Conflict is overt; tension is often covert
You need the main conflict
as well as smaller ones throughout your whole novel. A big plot point in your
story could be the hero has to fight the dragon; or your heroine has to fight
her teenage daughter. They are essential. Without them you don’t have a story.
BUT that’s not how Donald Maass describes tension in Fire in Fiction. He
describes it this way:
Micro-tension is the moment-by-moment tension that
keeps the reader in a constant state of suspense over what will happen, not in
the story but in the next few seconds.
While the plot of your
story is vital, the tension is what
keeps your reader engaged and turning the page. Robin shared with us
specific ways to develop tension in four types of writing. Exposition.
Description. Action. Dialog.
Tension in Exposition:
Often tension comes:
1.
From characters moving in opposing directions, or
unanswered questions, and/or hidden agendas.
2.
When the reader expects one thing and gets another,
that also causes tension.
3.
Often tension arises when the character isn’t aware of
it. Perhaps the reader read a scene in which a bad guy planted a bomb beneath a
café table. Now the hero is sitting at that table reading the newspaper,
sipping coffee. Enjoying the peace. While the reader is gripping the book with
white knuckles knowing there is a bomb right there. You don’t have to write the
tick-tick-tick. The reader’s
heartbeat is supplying it.
Exposition
is the moment in your manuscript where you’re explaining something. These are
not necessarily entire scenes but sections of scenes in which your character is
thinking. LOOK at each passage and ask do you really need it? What new thing
are you telling the reader they didn’t already know? If there is nothing, then
you have to either cut the section or create some tension.
How do you create tension in exposition?
Inner conflict: Your character wants one thing, and at the same time, he/she wants
the opposite. (EX: Character knows he/she shouldn’t say something, and he/she
does anyway.) (EX: Character longs for one thing and he/she fears it at the
same time.) (EX: He/she feels one thing on the surface, but something
unexpected or even opposite underneath.) If you add inner conflict to every
scene, tension will follow naturally.
Tips on adding tension in
your exposition:
1.
Never restate the obvious.
2.
When on the surface your character is feeling one way,
figure out what is the opposite of that…think of 3 or 4 choices…and then work
on one of those.
3.
Look for a source of inner conflict.
4.
What new thing can you introduce that sheds more light
on what’s happening in the story? It can be a bit of the character’s history or
a tidbit that makes him feel anxious, even when all should be well on the
surface.
5.
When your character is wrestling with a decision, how
can you make both choices seem equally appealing…or equally disastrous.
It’s important not to add
tension for tension’s sake. Your tension needs to highlight real story issues,
not make promises your book doesn’t deliver. Tension must be real.
Tension in Description:
Description can be some
pretty boring stuff, but if doesn’t have to be. Well done descriptions can add
immense tension to your story.
When writing the
description, don’t just write what you see. The point isn’t to see the details
and describe them; the point is to find the details that reflect what you want
the reader to see, to hear, to smell, to feel. It’s not just about describing
the obvious to the reader. Here’s an example from Charles Martin’s Chasing
Fireflies:
I stepped out into the sunlight humming a Pat Green tune, slipped on my sunglasses, and stared out over the courthouse steps. After three days of incarceration, not much had changed. Brunswick, Georgia, was like that. Discarded bubblegum, flat as half-dollars, dotted the steps like splattered ink. Lazy, blimpish pigeons strutted the sidewalk begging for bread scraps or the sprinkles off somebody's double-shot mocha latte. In the alley across the street, and entire herd of stray cats crept toward the wharf just four blocks down. The sound of seagulls told them the shrimp boats had returned. And on the steps next to me, two officers lifted a tattooed man, whose feet and hands were shackled and cuffed, up the steps and, undoubtedly, into Judge Thaxton's courtroom. Based on the mixture of saliva and epithets coming our of his mouth, he wasn't too crazy about going. No worries. Given my experience with Her Honor, his stay in her courtroom wouldn't be too long.
The tension is subtle. It's our first glimpse of the protagonist, and he seems as happy as can be. He shares these wonderful images--blimpish pigeons and sprinkles from a latte. He's even humming. So why does the reader have that sense of tension? That one little phrase changed the whole thing: "After three days of incarceration..."
Wait, what? The guy's leaving the jailhouse in the middle of town--presumably his own town, since he knows the place pretty well--and happy? How can that be?
That unspoken question would probably be enough to get you to turn the page, but then Charles Martin adds another image--the shackled man. Yes, it stays lighthearted, but there's ominousness about seeing someone shackled and dragged into a courthouse. And then one more line makes the reader wonder: "Given my experience with Her Honor..." So the hero's been in front of the judge before, enough to predict what she's going to do. And he's cheerful.
This guy's emotions are not conflicted. He seems as content as can be. But it causes some conflicting emotions in the reader, doesn't it? Normally someone just released from jail in his or her hometown would feel more--ashamed, embarrassed, humiliated, dishonored, indignant--Content...never. So why does he? It makes you want to keep reading. The contrast of the two--how he should feel, yet how he feels brings about tension.
I stepped out into the sunlight humming a Pat Green tune, slipped on my sunglasses, and stared out over the courthouse steps. After three days of incarceration, not much had changed. Brunswick, Georgia, was like that. Discarded bubblegum, flat as half-dollars, dotted the steps like splattered ink. Lazy, blimpish pigeons strutted the sidewalk begging for bread scraps or the sprinkles off somebody's double-shot mocha latte. In the alley across the street, and entire herd of stray cats crept toward the wharf just four blocks down. The sound of seagulls told them the shrimp boats had returned. And on the steps next to me, two officers lifted a tattooed man, whose feet and hands were shackled and cuffed, up the steps and, undoubtedly, into Judge Thaxton's courtroom. Based on the mixture of saliva and epithets coming our of his mouth, he wasn't too crazy about going. No worries. Given my experience with Her Honor, his stay in her courtroom wouldn't be too long.
The tension is subtle. It's our first glimpse of the protagonist, and he seems as happy as can be. He shares these wonderful images--blimpish pigeons and sprinkles from a latte. He's even humming. So why does the reader have that sense of tension? That one little phrase changed the whole thing: "After three days of incarceration..."
Wait, what? The guy's leaving the jailhouse in the middle of town--presumably his own town, since he knows the place pretty well--and happy? How can that be?
That unspoken question would probably be enough to get you to turn the page, but then Charles Martin adds another image--the shackled man. Yes, it stays lighthearted, but there's ominousness about seeing someone shackled and dragged into a courthouse. And then one more line makes the reader wonder: "Given my experience with Her Honor..." So the hero's been in front of the judge before, enough to predict what she's going to do. And he's cheerful.
This guy's emotions are not conflicted. He seems as content as can be. But it causes some conflicting emotions in the reader, doesn't it? Normally someone just released from jail in his or her hometown would feel more--ashamed, embarrassed, humiliated, dishonored, indignant--Content...never. So why does he? It makes you want to keep reading. The contrast of the two--how he should feel, yet how he feels brings about tension.
Word Choice, how your protagonist filters what she sees, hears, and feels, can add tension to your description. Word choice should do double-duty. First it needs to help the reader picture the setting. Second it needs to reflect the character in some way. It's not about the thing being described, it's about how your reader feels about the thing--be in the landscape or a new dress. The tension comes from those feelings.
Tips to adding tension to description:
1. Put yourself in the eyes of the POV character. Spend some time there and figure out what he/she would notice. You can't tell the reader everything; so choose your details carefully.
2. Start with a broad brush, then narrow into key details, details you can use to reflect your character's feelings.
3. Choose words that reflect the picture you're trying to paint. Hard words, soft words, whimsical words, or concrete words...they all subtly lead the reader to one place or another.
4. Go beyond the obvious emotion if you can. Sometimes, the obvious emotion is the one you want to convey, but sometimes it isn't what the protagonist feels.
5. Add a few key phrases that'll make your reader ask some questions, encouraging them to turn the page.
6. If you're working on a segment at the start of your story, before the inciting incident, think of your character's innermost desire. What does your character want? That can be the driving force of that first segment of description. Let that desire be reflected.
Don't skip the description in your book fearing it might be boring. The reader wants to be in the setting. They can't if you don't take them there. Find a way to make your descriptions drip with emotion and tension.
Tension in Action:
If you really want your action scenes to drip with tension, you need to do more than just provide a lot of action.
What is action? It is the parts of your book where your characters are doing something.
Tips for adding tension to action scenes:
1. Be unpredictable. Sometimes, your hero and heroine have to lose. Sometimes bad things have to happen. When you're writing an action scene, brainstorm five things that can happen, then brainstorm five more. Maybe choose an option from the bottom of that last list.
2. Increase the stakes. How else can your scene matter to your story, to the community, and to the world?
3. Get your heroes personally involved. Show us why this matters to the hero, to his family, to his community.
4. Raise questions...and don't offer answers right away. Never answer one question before you raise another.
Tension in Dialogue:
Tips to adding tension to your dialog:
1. Eliminate every predictable word. Tension arises in the readers when they are kept off-guard. So what things are predictable? Nicknames, pet names; nonsense words like Uh, um; Filler words like well, so, anyway, greetings; direct answers.
2. Eliminate as many dialog tags (he said, she said) as possible without confusing the reader. Eliminate EVERY dialog tag that accompanies an action beat. (EX: "Almost there," he said as he turned left.-- instead write -- "Almost there." He turned left.)
3. Eliminate all adverbs within dialog tags. (EX: "I love you," he said softly. -- instead write -- "I love you," he whispered.
4. Eliminate fancy words used for said. (EX: "I love you," he declared.) If you have to tell reader who said it, stick with he said or asked. Readers tend to skim over those words. EXCEPT when you are using a more specific word to describe how something was said and it's very important to specify...like whispered, shouted, or screamed. Use them, but use them sparingly.
5. Eliminate telling in dialog. (If you can start the sentence with "As you know," delete it. Find another way to tell the reader...better to be in exposition than in dialog.
6. Eliminate straight answers. (EX: "How's it going?" "Fine, you?" - write - "How's it going" "Don't start with me.") (that was unexpected and not boring. Now you want to know why they responded that way.) Another example. ("How's it going?" "Do you know what you get when you cross a train wreck and a category 4 hurricane?" Silence filled the room. "That's how it's going."
7. When you've cut out all the unnecessary stuff, see what you have left and figure out how else you can say what you're trying to say without saying anything obvious.
8. Ensure your characters all have different agendas, and find subtle ways or overt, depending on the scene, to show those differing agendas.
If a piece of dialog comes easily, you've more than likely made it too predictable. Try finding a unique way to have your characters respond. Make sure it matches their personalities though.
The tips above came from Robin Patchen's on line class I took. I hope they help you as much as I believe they are helping me. God bless you all.
deb
Tuesday, July 14, 2015
An Interview with Dani Pettrey
Hello everyone.
As the title states, we have that interview I mentioned I was trying to get with Dani Pettrey. She is an awesome author. She wrote the Alaskan Courage series. They include extreme sports and activities...keeping you on the edge of your seat as you read. Her stories pulled me in quickly and kept me reading until the end of each. I had to have them all. If I remember correctly at the time 3 were available with the 4th book about to be released. Of course I got it immediately and then had to wait for number 5 to come out. I pre-ordered, so I got it as soon as it was available. If you are looking for a GREAT read this summer, pick one of hers up or download them in your E-reader. Her interview is here for my readers and fellow writers to enjoy.
Before I add it, I want to update you on what is going on in my life as I normally do in my blogs.
I also hope you are having a wonderful summer!
My summer has been filled with writing and sunning with more of both to come. As I mentioned to you before, I sent in a completed manuscript to my publisher at the end of May, Hidden Secrets. Still waiting to hear back. They must be busy, busy as they are growing by leaps and bounds. Since then I've worked on the 4th book of the Samantha Cain series - Against Her Will. It was scheduled to release in 2014, but those who have been connected with me through my blogging know I lost my dear sweet husband March 2nd of 2014. We had taken a trip to the Caribbean earlier, where I made notes of the surroundings and the people to include in this novel, since my characters would be traveling down there. I had started the novel earlier on, but could not work on it after his passing. The memories hurt too bad. Of course they were beautiful memories, just hard to relive knowing Scott wouldn't be with me any more. Anyway, I've been working on its completion ever since the first of June, and now thanks to my critique partners jumping on it quickly, I'm working on the rewrites and edits now. I'm hoping to have it to my publisher by the end of July. I hope you all are still looking forward to the read.
In the mean time, I learned Thorndike Press republished Crime in The Big Easy that released July 1st (I mentioned this in June's blog), and they have scheduled Be Not Afraid to release August 1st, with Testimony of Innocence not far behind...September 1st. The specialty of Thorndike Press is they publish in hardback with large print. This was exciting news to me.
God has blessed my writing career, using Oak Tara Publishing. They connected my work to Barbour Publishing having that collection of Deborah Lynne novels released May 1st, 2015 and now this with Thorndike Press. In the meantime, my job is to keep writing while He does the heavy lifting...spreading my work...touching the hearts of my readers.
He also lead me to start writing that non-fiction book, Guidance from The Light, I mentioned to you. It is a two month devotion so far. Until I've written all 12 months, I show it as days 1 - whatever number I'm on. This devotion is free for the download off of my website. I'll be adding the third month by the end of July for those of you who have already downloaded the first two months. When it's completed, I will make it available as a book and carry it with me to the arts and craft shows I attend. I hope His Word and how He blessed me through His Word, will also be a blessing to you. Take time to look at Guidance from The Light on my web site at your convenience. click here for website
My husband's birthday is coming up next week. Last year my kids (minus 1 who lives in California but is working to get transferred back this way -- so maybe 2016's trip she will be a part of), grandkids, and his twin sister took a trip together to the beach, to the same place we had gone with Scott the year before his death. It made it easier on all of us to be together, missing him together, loving him together, yet celebrating his victory in Heaven with The Lord together. It made our loss of him easier to bear together. It's that time again. This time I believe it will be filled with more smiles and joy than last time. We still miss Scott tremendously, but know in our hearts he is rejoicing and is better off...and that one day we will be with him rejoicing with The Lord. Life goes on. So to the beach we are going together. More summer relaxing. Again, I hope you've been enjoying your summer as well.
NOW WHAT YOU HAVE ALL BEEN WAITING FOR:
The interview of Dani Pettrey. She is a jewel. Enjoy.
*****
*****
*****
There you have it friends. Wasn't she great, taking time out to answer a few questions to share with other writers who are trying to write or sell their first book...to encourage them. Also I asked for this interview with her to help you who read my books find another author who I know you will love. Her stories inspire me. Go get you a copy and start reading. You won't regret it.
As the title states, we have that interview I mentioned I was trying to get with Dani Pettrey. She is an awesome author. She wrote the Alaskan Courage series. They include extreme sports and activities...keeping you on the edge of your seat as you read. Her stories pulled me in quickly and kept me reading until the end of each. I had to have them all. If I remember correctly at the time 3 were available with the 4th book about to be released. Of course I got it immediately and then had to wait for number 5 to come out. I pre-ordered, so I got it as soon as it was available. If you are looking for a GREAT read this summer, pick one of hers up or download them in your E-reader. Her interview is here for my readers and fellow writers to enjoy.
Before I add it, I want to update you on what is going on in my life as I normally do in my blogs.
I also hope you are having a wonderful summer!
My summer has been filled with writing and sunning with more of both to come. As I mentioned to you before, I sent in a completed manuscript to my publisher at the end of May, Hidden Secrets. Still waiting to hear back. They must be busy, busy as they are growing by leaps and bounds. Since then I've worked on the 4th book of the Samantha Cain series - Against Her Will. It was scheduled to release in 2014, but those who have been connected with me through my blogging know I lost my dear sweet husband March 2nd of 2014. We had taken a trip to the Caribbean earlier, where I made notes of the surroundings and the people to include in this novel, since my characters would be traveling down there. I had started the novel earlier on, but could not work on it after his passing. The memories hurt too bad. Of course they were beautiful memories, just hard to relive knowing Scott wouldn't be with me any more. Anyway, I've been working on its completion ever since the first of June, and now thanks to my critique partners jumping on it quickly, I'm working on the rewrites and edits now. I'm hoping to have it to my publisher by the end of July. I hope you all are still looking forward to the read.
In the mean time, I learned Thorndike Press republished Crime in The Big Easy that released July 1st (I mentioned this in June's blog), and they have scheduled Be Not Afraid to release August 1st, with Testimony of Innocence not far behind...September 1st. The specialty of Thorndike Press is they publish in hardback with large print. This was exciting news to me.
God has blessed my writing career, using Oak Tara Publishing. They connected my work to Barbour Publishing having that collection of Deborah Lynne novels released May 1st, 2015 and now this with Thorndike Press. In the meantime, my job is to keep writing while He does the heavy lifting...spreading my work...touching the hearts of my readers.
He also lead me to start writing that non-fiction book, Guidance from The Light, I mentioned to you. It is a two month devotion so far. Until I've written all 12 months, I show it as days 1 - whatever number I'm on. This devotion is free for the download off of my website. I'll be adding the third month by the end of July for those of you who have already downloaded the first two months. When it's completed, I will make it available as a book and carry it with me to the arts and craft shows I attend. I hope His Word and how He blessed me through His Word, will also be a blessing to you. Take time to look at Guidance from The Light on my web site at your convenience. click here for website
My husband's birthday is coming up next week. Last year my kids (minus 1 who lives in California but is working to get transferred back this way -- so maybe 2016's trip she will be a part of), grandkids, and his twin sister took a trip together to the beach, to the same place we had gone with Scott the year before his death. It made it easier on all of us to be together, missing him together, loving him together, yet celebrating his victory in Heaven with The Lord together. It made our loss of him easier to bear together. It's that time again. This time I believe it will be filled with more smiles and joy than last time. We still miss Scott tremendously, but know in our hearts he is rejoicing and is better off...and that one day we will be with him rejoicing with The Lord. Life goes on. So to the beach we are going together. More summer relaxing. Again, I hope you've been enjoying your summer as well.
NOW WHAT YOU HAVE ALL BEEN WAITING FOR:
The interview of Dani Pettrey. She is a jewel. Enjoy.
*****
I’m glad to say, the author I mentioned in the past few
months of blogging, Dani Pettrey, has agreed to an interview by me. I know you will love
her as much as I do. I hope by now, you’ve bought some of her books and found
out how great she really is.
Thank you, Dani, for allowing me to spend a little time with
you as I pick your brain. Some of my readers are people who read Deborah Lynne
novels, and some are writers growing their craft. As a writer myself, I love
getting to talk to fellow authors and find out more about them. Thank you for
taking time to answer my questions below.
1. What made you start writing? Tell us a little
bit about your journey of writing and how you connected with your publisher for
your first book?
I have always loved daydreaming and making up stories. I dabbled with
creative writing growing up, but set it aside. It wasn’t until after the birth
of my youngest daughter and a bout with a serious illness, that I really felt
God stirring me to start writing again.
When I first began, I
spent a lot of time simply reading novels, seeing how they worked, analyzing
why I fell in love with certain characters and not others. I attended writing
conferences, joined a writer’s group and devoted regular time to writing. I was
also blessed with an amazing mentor who really shepherded me in the craft and
writing life.
I finished Submerged
just prior to the ACFW conference a number of years back. I hadn’t been in a
couple years, but I really felt led to go. I signed up last minute and put in
for appointments with the editor and agent I really hoped to meet with. Since I
registered so late, I didn’t get appointments with either. But God has a way of
working things out. My first night at the conference I attended a Late Night
Chat for Bethany House. I spoke with Dave Long afterwards and he graciously
allowed me to send him the first three chapters. A couple weeks later I got an
email from him requesting the full manuscript. A few after that I received a
contract offer. It was absolutely amazing to get an offer for the book of my
heart.
2. Was Submerged, Book 1 of the Alaskan Courage
series, the first novel you ever wrote?
No. I had two
‘practice’ manuscripts, which will never see the light of day, and two
submission manuscripts before I wrote Submerged.
God knew I needed the practice and the timing. When I received my contract
offer both of my girls were close to grown and it was just so abundantly clear
that it was God’s timing and not mine. I’m so thankful I got published when I
did and not with the earlier manuscripts, thought I may one day rewrite one of
them as the story is still near and dear to my heart.
3. I was wondering, in your series the family owns
a store called, The Last Frontier Adventures, where they specialize in carrying
gear for the extreme sports enthusiast as well as offer trips/tours that
include the sport…are you writing from experience in these sports? If so, share
a little…if not, tell us what made you go that route. By the way, every book
had such excitement and fun wrapped into the story. Job well done!!
Thanks so much! We
are a pretty adventurous family, but not to the extreme that the McKennas are.
So while I’ve been white-water rafting, rock climbing, skiing, sailing, etc.
I’ve never been heli-skiing or free climbing. I like to say I’m a moderate
adventurer while the McKennas are most definitely on the extreme end of
adventure.
I’ve always been
fascinated and awed by extreme athletes so getting to write, to research various
extreme adventures and to write about a family who pursues them for a living
was absolutely fabulous.
4. Which of the five is your most favorite book in
the series?
This is such a hard one to answer. I really
love different aspects about each book in the series. In Submerged, I love getting to meet all the characters and being
introduced to Yancey, Alaska. Shattered
has my favorite love story, Stranded my favorite adventure, Silenced my favorite mystery, and Sabotaged my favorite setting. If forced
<smile> to pick one, I’d probably have to go with Submerged as it was the start of the series, I love the historical
aspect, and I really identify with the heroine Bailey Craig.
5. Of the couples who found, or re-found, one
another in your storyline, which is your most favorite couple and why?
Again, such a hard
question. I’m really partial to Cole and Bailey reuniting, but I truly think my
favorite love story is Landon and Piper’s. I love the dynamic between the two,
and Landon is my kind of guy. He’s hardworking, struggling to be
more than his past lineage, loyal and he loves fiercely. He is a little rough
around the edges, but has a heart of gold. I love the way he loves Piper.
6. I was sorry to learn book 5 was the last of your
series because I loved the family and friends you created. So tell us, where
are you taking us next? And when should we be looking for your next release?
I just finished writing the first book (COLD
SHOT) in a new four-book series entitled Chesapeake Valor. The series focuses
on four adult friends who grew up together in the Chesapeake Bay area. I’m
really enjoying getting to share the gorgeous and diverse area where I live
with readers. Within the state of Maryland we have beaches, mountains, a major
city (Baltimore), small towns, farms, and, of course, the beautiful Chesapeake
Bay. I hope readers who enjoy the Alaskan Courage series will enjoy the
Chesapeake Valor series. COLD SHOT will be available February 2, 2016, but it
is available for pre-order now on Amazon.
Can't wait!! I'm looking forward to the new series all ready. Thank
you, Dani, for your time that you shared with us. Continue on your writing
path. We love your books and look forward to the next one. (and truth be told,
I couldn’t pick a favorite story, one over the other 4. I loved them all as far as the stories go.
For the favorite couple, you picked mine. I loved Landon and Piper too!!!
Thank you so very much for having me.
Dani
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